[分享]第一次喝中药（第八届春雨杯四年级一等奖）

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<div style="LINE-HEIGHT: 25pt; TEXT-INDENT: 28.5pt"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">我</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">生活中</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">的很多个“</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">第一次</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">”给我带来了美</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">妙的感受，比如第一次为</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">学校里主持六一节目、第一次坐飞机去海南</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">、第一次在家乡看到雪</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">…</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">..</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">这些第一次</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">都</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">让我</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; font-emphasize: dot">回味无穷</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">，但是并不是所有的第一次都是美妙的，就比如我</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">——</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">第一次喝中药。</span></div>
<div style="LINE-HEIGHT: 25pt; TEXT-INDENT: 28.5pt"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">要说中药怎么会和我扯上关系呢？还不是</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">因为</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">我的近视。</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">妈妈听说同事的孩子服用中药后治疗效果明显，于是也</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">给我抓来了</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">几副中药，让我也试试看。</span></div>
<div style="LINE-HEIGHT: 25pt; TEXT-INDENT: 28.5pt"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">我脑海里立刻浮现出妈</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">妈上次喝中药时那皱眉咬牙的样子，而且最可怕的是我在煎药</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">的锅里居然发现一只只干枯的蝉，妈妈说是“蝉衣”，想到这里，我简直</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; font-emphasize: dot">不寒而栗</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">了：天知道里面有些什么东西呢，说不定里面也有昆虫的尸体</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">……</span></div>
<div style="LINE-HEIGHT: 25pt; TEXT-INDENT: 28.5pt"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">还没等我想好对</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">策，妈妈已经</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; font-emphasize: dot">出其不意</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">地端着已经煎好的中药微笑着站在我眼前了。</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; TEXT-DECORATION: underline; text-underline: #800000 wave">这微笑现在在我的眼里</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; TEXT-DECORATION: underline; text-underline: #800000 wave">就如洪水猛兽</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; TEXT-DECORATION: underline; text-underline: #800000 wave">，</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; TEXT-DECORATION: underline; text-underline: #800000 wave">使我胆战心惊</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; TEXT-DECORATION: underline; text-underline: #800000 wave">。我不</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; TEXT-DECORATION: underline; text-underline: #800000 wave">甘“束手就擒”</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; TEXT-DECORATION: underline; text-underline: #800000 wave">，做</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; TEXT-DECORATION: underline; text-underline: #800000 wave">“哀兵状”</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; TEXT-DECORATION: underline; text-underline: #800000 wave">：“妈妈，这黑乎乎、苦兮兮的东西您居然忍心让您可爱的孩子喝？太恐怖了！”</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; TEXT-DECORATION: underline; text-underline: #800000 wave">“</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">别废话了，这药</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">很珍贵</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">的，是我们学校的</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">谢老师去杭州一个有名的中医那里配的，她的孩子喝了效果很好。你放心，里面还有红枣、枸杞，味道不错的。”&nbsp;</span></div>
<div style="LINE-HEIGHT: 25pt; TEXT-INDENT: 24pt"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">&nbsp;</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; TEXT-DECORATION: underline; text-underline: #800000 wave">我将信将疑，象狗一样把鼻子凑过去，对着这碗中药使劲嗅起来</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; TEXT-DECORATION: underline; text-underline: #800000 wave">——</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; TEXT-DECORATION: underline; text-underline: #800000 wave">丝丝缕缕说不清但绝对令人</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; TEXT-DECORATION: underline; text-underline: #800000 wave">不舒服的气味钻到我的鼻孔里；细看，</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; TEXT-DECORATION: underline; text-underline: #800000 wave">碗里</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; TEXT-DECORATION: underline; text-underline: #800000 wave">还</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; TEXT-DECORATION: underline; text-underline: #800000 wave">漂浮</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; TEXT-DECORATION: underline; text-underline: #800000 wave">着几片可疑之物</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">……</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">我实在没有勇气喝下去，连连后退，嘴里还嚷着：</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">“让我喝这个东西，不如就戴眼镜呢！近视就近视，有什么大不了，你们</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">也</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">都是</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">近视</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">……</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">”</span></div>
<div style="LINE-HEIGHT: 25pt; TEXT-INDENT: 28.5pt"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">“你这孩子，</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">怎么不听话了？</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">乖，快点喝下去，每天一贴，一定有效果的哦。”“不喝，就是不喝。”眼看我不就范，妈妈凉凉地祭出撒手锏：“</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">如此遇难而退，还想成为军人</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">！</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">再说，</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">都近视了还想当军人？</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">”啊？妈妈好狠心，</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">明知道我最大的理想就是</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">成为</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">虎虎生威的</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">军人</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">，将来上战场冲锋陷阵，现在</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">…</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">..</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">！我进退两难：</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">哎，</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">为了我伟大的理想，</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">喝吧</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">！</span></div>
<div style="LINE-HEIGHT: 25pt; TEXT-INDENT: 28.5pt"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; text-underline: #800000">我端起碗，如奔赴战场的勇士，嘴里喃喃念着“风萧萧兮易水寒</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; text-underline: #800000">…</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; text-underline: #800000">..”</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">然</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">后一仰头往口里灌药汁。“噗”的一声，已是半口吐出来。“苦死人啦</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">。”</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; TEXT-DECORATION: underline; text-underline: #800000 wave"> 我头一歪，眼一闭，软软地倒在地上“装死”想逃过这“刑罚”。</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">妈妈早有准备，变戏法般手里出现一碗开水：“别装了，没事，漱漱口再来。”啊，我只好慢吞吞爬起来继续和“敌人”奋斗</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">…</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">..</span></div>
<div style="LINE-HEIGHT: 25pt; TEXT-INDENT: 28.5pt"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">可是这碗中药的难喝实在超出我的承受力，我只喝了半碗，就受不了</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">呕吐起来，那样子吓坏了妈妈，我终于逃过一劫，不用再喝它啦！可是这已经造成后遗症，只要我一看到中药，我的肚子里就会翻滚起来，喉咙里就想吐口水</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">……</span></div>
<div style="LINE-HEIGHT: 25pt; TEXT-INDENT: 28.5pt"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt">你说，这个第一次，难道还是美妙的第一次吗？</span></div>
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<div style="TEXT-INDENT: 21pt"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt">文章一开头就拿自己不同的第一次感受作对比，引起读者阅读兴趣。</span></div>
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<div style="TEXT-INDENT: 21pt"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt">点出自己喝中药的原因。</span></div>
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<div style="TEXT-INDENT: 21pt"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt">为下文自己不想喝中药埋下伏笔。</span></div>
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<div style="TEXT-INDENT: 21pt"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt">妈妈的“一把火”使我不得不“就范”。</span></div>
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<div style="TEXT-INDENT: 21pt"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt">小孩子的狡黠</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt">可爱，令人忍俊不禁。</span></div>
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<div style="TEXT-INDENT: 21pt"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt">首尾呼应，结构严谨，浑然一体。</span></div></td></tr></tbody></table></div>